Cut and paste...
This isn't that bad, dude! The samples have a certain charm to them. Just - it's too light. If you shortened the duration of repetition and made some of the samples breaks in a heavy drum & bass or electro track, it'd probably be pretty sweet.
I've got a lot of respect for originality.
Keep up the good work. :)
Continuity missed...
The break was so smooth that it felt like an ending, and the fact that the pick-up had nothing to do with the previously heard tune, it seemed like another song had started. Not good.
Also, you had good energy at the beginning of the song, but you lacked enough variation in the beat and rhythm (could hardly hear the bass), that it sort of died, even before the break.
Don't put vocals in just because you want vocals... and don't base an entire song on one sample, especially when it's weak. If either of those is what you did - yeah, don't. If not, just realize that's sort of what it seemed like.
Keep it up. :)
HEY JPhoenix84! First of all thx for reviewing! For this song i wanted to try a somethi9ng a little different. I agree it does sound like 2 songs at some points. Another thing is that i didnt ust put vocasl in cause i wanted them, i thought they fit well and i built them around the song, i didnt just slap them on and pressed play. Anyway thx for your review!
Conflicting Tones
I liked the pace, though it didn't make me think of an aftermath. You should have kept it more mysterious, rather than odd, in my opinion. That last sound that comes in is a little out of place with what I get used to, and it changes the feeling. I don't think that's good.
You started with a good thing. Keep it up. :)
lol ok thanks for the review
Why don't you make something good?
I've listened to a bunch of your stuff now, and it, for the most part, really sucks! It's terrible.
You don't show any real talent, except for that of pasting a bunch of stolen stuff together.
Also, the samples you use and the lyrics that you "spit" are pretty offensive, and not in any funny kind of way.
It doesn't really seem like you're taking yourself seriously, so I'm gonna' quit here.
who are you anyway? I just responded to your first review. I appreciate the input and everything but wash the sand out your vagina please. Sorry if I offended you with the lyrics I spit.
Kindergarten
The amount of emphasis on the already unnecessary "f" word killed the whole thing as it was already dying. Is that loop taken directly from "Clint Eastwood" or am I from another reality? What's with the sound of the voice? I don't think you naturally produce that reverb. You aren't singing in time with the beat or rhythm in way too many parts.
I appreciate your review. It was very informative. I'll take everything you said into consideration. That reverb ya heard was an echo I added on. I duplicated the track and staggered them to create the echo. The loop was from clint eastwood which I turned into an instrumental. My, voice, that's just the way I rap sometimes, I like to practice versatility. Thanks for the review, even though I don't really take them seriously because I don't mess with flash, I just use fianl cut pro for movie editing. Alot of my shit is for shits and giggles. If you checked my tracks you'd see that.
What happened?
You started out with that odd sound effect, and when the guitar came in... I was happy. It's sort of infectious in its tranquility, but what the hell were you trying to do near the end?
My motto is to keep what's good. Explore, but be practical about it. I'm not sure what your intention was with this track, but most of what it did for me was confuse in a distracting kind of way.
Keep creating. :)
Ha, I was pleased with the the "sound effect" too. I agree. I was dissapointed at how the second part sounds on here. When I complete the song, I will submit a perfect Hallway Abyss. Because I love the tranquility.
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